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  Annie Oakley and Me
« on: July 29, 2009, 05:38:28 PM » by Lynn Doiron
In my daydream we are riding a train and the tracks are not smooth; the train is not new but from the turn of the last century, perhaps 1920 or 30.  Velvet curtains with fringe hang at the windows, brass fixtures glow with the touch of the sun angling through.  I’m daydreaming a private car; my companion is Annie Oakley.
     In actuality, I’m riding a bus and the roads here in Mexico have potholes a Volkswagen bug could slide into and never be seen again.  In actuality the seat next to me holds a ten or twelve-year-old boy with a cage on his lap containing a chicken.  Both the boy and the chicken are quiet; their heads nod as if both are taking small naps.
   My head nods too.  The bus hits a pothole but Annie Oakley and I take the side-to-side bobble of the dreamed train on its dreamed tracks in stride.  The bobbles are as natural to us as wind would be to rooted prairie grass on the plains – we right ourselves again without conscious effort.  For long spells of time, neither one of us speaks.  We are sewing, our needles going into and out of goods we hold in our laps.  She’s working an embroidered pattern of red roses a few inches above the fringed hem of one of her sharpshooter show skirts; I’m backstitching in black the block letters of my name on the inside cuff of a dark brown silk shirt.  Annie borrows my scissors to snip a thread.  She hands them back.
   We are both sixty; we are both content to rock along the track we are on and we are both headed somewhere – somewhere perhaps not better, perhaps not worse, but different.  I think about how precisely she’d snipped that thread, barely taking time to aim and close in on that thin presence of red string, my scissors leaving less than a sigh for the ear to pick up on.  I remark on her tiny hands.  She responds with a slight lowering of her lids as if to say, Yes, small is good.
   I dot the “i” in my last name with a black French knot.  Annie says, “You make a fine French knot.”
   “Thank you.  I’ve practiced a lot.”
   Annie does that lid-lowering acknowledgment thingie again with her eyes.  The fringe on the velvet curtains in the private car sway as the train bobbles again.  Annie and I, like that prairie grass in the wind, sway too.
   The boy with the caged chicken is gone when I open my eyes.  The bus is stopped.  Annie has packed up her private train car full of sun-touched brass and gone on to some place different while a different woman, about my age I would guess by the lines in her face.  Two long and very dark braids run vertically down her dress front.  Her hair I think, must be nearly as long as she is tall.  When she opens a small basket and pulls bright-colored threads out to continue weaving a bracelet with a name in the design, I am content.  The bus rocks through another pothole.  We sway, the dark-haired woman and I, both on our way to some place different.
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  Re: Annie Oakley and Me
« Reply #1 on: August 07, 2009, 06:19:00 AM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie
I just enjoyed this again, Chicky. The euphoria
of 'not being pregnant anymore' has finally worn
off and I'm heading to sleep. Call ya later.

Mugs
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  Re: Annie Oakley and Me
« Reply #2 on: August 07, 2009, 01:00:27 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Thanks, Maggie.  It's a tough sell to get a read in the prose section; glad you stopped by.  And congrats on the delivery of that five-year gestation period baby!
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  Re: Annie Oakley and Me
« Reply #3 on: August 27, 2009, 10:38:57 AM » by silent lotus
dear Lynn

this reads so well
it invites the pleasure of returning

a warm smile
silent lotus
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  Re: Annie Oakley and Me
« Reply #4 on: August 27, 2009, 10:05:16 PM » by Lynn Doiron
thank you, SL.  i do like to daydream.  glad you enjoyed this.
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  Re: Annie Oakley and Me
« Reply #5 on: August 28, 2009, 03:11:58 PM » by larry jordan
I'm ashamed to say I missed this. The prose board does get neglected. Lynn, there's a poem in this: What if narrated by the passenger who hitched a ride near Rosa-whatever and is picked up by this white woman who reminds him of Annie Oakley. He feels sorry for her, because she doesn't have a chicken for sale...

You are a hopeless romantic. I am worried that I recognize the condition.

larry
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  Re: Annie Oakley and Me
« Reply #6 on: August 28, 2009, 04:11:52 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Grins here.  What daydreamer isn't hopeless?  hmm?
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