Harbour

I fantasized we met
near the sea by inn-light
when October was old and
hinged by a device of the moon
or rudeness in your beauty from
such movements to a shanty of buckles
that let a kindness in your fingers
soap me in a shallow bath.

Oh, I'm there, Peter! Fine poem, I think, rich, vivid and mysterious at once. Tom

tres bien!

Stella

Thank you ever so much Tom,
you too Silent Lotus,
merci Stella

Very fine Peter.  Love the veiled quality...

k

Beautifully atmospheric, Peter. Is it just me, though, or does your syntax go awry at L4 - 5?

Still, I do like it, especially "hinged by a device of the moon".

Cheers

David

Thanks muchly Kevin & David

It's just you, David.  {:-)~  No, only kidding.  I can't see the awriness at the moment but I'll look again

Cor! A fantastic read. More, please!

Pam

Thank you, Pam.  Been a while since I read this.  Quite enjoyed it myself :-)

David, on re-reading, I see what u mean now about that syntax.  Removed comma at line 4 - that might do trick

How gorgeous, Peter. I often bypass the resurrected poems but very glad I took another look here! Tom

i'm digging it; no nits from me.

tiko

Tom and Tiko - thank you, guys

I'm with you up until moon then you lose me at "or" - why "or"?  I have a feeling that I'm being dense but I can't figure out what the or refers back to - unfortunately it throws me out of the read again and again - if I could just hinge the word to connect the two pieces I would love it - M