barrelhouse 1

one kinda man
he go 'head
dance without ya

nutha man who
he don't want to
but he do it

an' a man who
it don't matter
he don't dance

which kinda man
ya in de mood fo'
sugar bucket

 ya wanna man
 don't ask no
 stupid questions

 I ain't
 dat kinda man

 ain't nevuh met
 dat kinda man

 an' look like
 you ain't met him
 neither

 sugar bucket

wanna man
who ain't no
smart ass

he don't call ya
sugar bucket

justa plain
ole man

de kind
he put his
hand out

an' jus'
a'ks ya

wanna dance
wi' me


“barrelhouse 2” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16100
“barrelhouse 3” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16106
“barrelhouse 4” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16107
“barrelhouse 5” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16112
“barrelhouse 6” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16115
“barrelhouse 7” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16118
“barrelhouse 8” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16123
"barrelhouse 9” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16122 (in Community Discussions)
“barrelhouse 10” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16124 (in Workshop)
“barrelhouse 11” www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16127 (in Workshop)
“barrelhouse 12-16” (end) www.poetrycircle.com/index.php/topic,16128 (in Workshop)

..moving to Submit board..

I enjoyed the whole darn bunch.

Lavonne, I appreciate your having a look at them all. Thank you, and I'm very glad you enjoyed them. Tom

tom--this one is fun! enjoyed the first installment, will read the others over the course of the day.

Stewart, I'm glad you had a look and hope you do continue. I thought of you at various points while working on it, especially the music bit. Thanks, Tom

Still don't understand the last one fully.  Dying to know what it's about.  Well, not exactly dying...but I REALLY want to know.

cheryl

c, I'll pm you about this, let you know what's supposed to be going on, and maybe you can tell me what goes wrong...thanks, tom

p.s.
made a couple edits to the area you pointed out, Cheryl. you were right. thanks, Tom

Hey Tom, yeah, I understand now.  Thanks for writing such great stories.

cheryl

Thanks for looking again. I have trouble because I want so much to be left off the page, in the pauses; at the same time, I have the voices and inflections so vividly in my own ear; it's hard to guess what you will hear.

left off the page

wow, never thought of that, or thought of it that way.

oh no...I feel the sense of another change coming...something new to learn.

and I'm not even good at the other stuff yet.

almost all of us overdo that part regularly.
that said, i guess it's one of poetry's defining features, all that empty space both typographically and otherwise