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  Re: Parakeet
« Reply #15 on: February 09, 2010, 01:49:44 AM » by Tom Riordan
yeah, Sherry, hard to kick that song...
thanks for encouraging words about poem...
Tom
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  Re: Parakeet
« Reply #16 on: February 09, 2010, 02:06:43 AM » by rashmi
enjoyed your poem tom!

esp. the line: 'dogs know you want a wag' - wonder if it cannot be: dog knows you want a wag?

a very valid point against love at first sight: What dog, child, lover loved
you at first sight, before you helped with food, words, touch

i think the poem should end at: hey look a flamingo.

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  Re: Parakeet
« Reply #17 on: February 09, 2010, 08:56:52 AM » by Tom Riordan
Thanks for both ideas, Rashmi. I will go back and consider them. Tom
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« Reply #18 on: February 09, 2010, 09:13:13 AM » by Sherry Thrasher
I enjoy reading Stevens but never quite got this poem.
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It snowed last year too: I made a snowman and my brother knocked it down and I knocked my brother down and then we had tea.
~Dylan Thomas

http://www.culinarygradseekswritinggig.blogspot.com

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