Didn't necessarily mean those type of curtains - although I like their image - but am feeling happier now that the idea comes across  that the room is sun-curtained (N not able to see the sun) and it doesn't matter if the sun is actually shining at that time of day that the mdnight implies

Peter,

for me there is beauty and grit in this, as if the dance defiled. 

enjoyed.

tiko

Just adding my applause, Peter.

milner

I missed this and must add my praise. The cadence is wonderful and for me, the bump about the sense of curtain simply keeps the ambiguity at the right pitch.

larry

Not sure why I missed this but glad to have found it now. Wonderful read.

Merci beaucoup - Tiko, Milner, Larry and Lavonne - tres apprécié

(a strange feeling of Frenchness has come over me tonight lol)

Peter, stopped by to read again and relish again. A wonder full creation.   "Sun-curtained" works for me because I read it as that room (heaven, judgement, the other place?) is always curtained by the sun, or rather by what the sun represents.

(Funny how tangled up spiritual stuff gets the minute you try to use logic!)

k

Just to add my 2 cents about the sun-curtained. I think it works well. I did some googling and found that they can also be called "opaque curtains".
Again, enjoyed this much!!
JC

Ta guys

Peter, a delight to find this on the front page.  It grows deeper with every read.  Outstanding my friend.

k

congrats, Peter! tom

Will enjoy this through the week, Peter.

milner

I like this poem, but, I thought the last line lacked the punch and pizazz I was feeling from the preceding lines. Perhaps, it feels a bit like it was written in haste with little editing. Sometimes, nice outlines of what could be good poems emerge, and while I think this is nearly a complete poem I think there are areas that could use elaboration and clarification. And, pizazz on that last line. Just me. And, also, a wonderful poem despite my cranky criticism.

Joe

P.S. The title, also, rubs me the wrong way...seems cliche, and almost humorous?

What a lovely surprise! Thank you for choosing this for the front page, Lynn.

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Kevin, Tom and Milner - Thanks again guys

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Thanks Joe.  Some good food for thought there

No humorous intent meant!

Peter, just wanted to say thanks for your 'thanks' and to add how beautiful and real I find this this poem.  It has a quality that seems almost unfinished in its brevity, a simple plainness and sincerity that touches me deeply.  For this reader, if the work were more polished, I'm not certain I'd have found the same connection.  It is all so very subjective -- what lines or words or ideas will move me on a particular day and given a particular mood or state of mind.  I've revisited this poem several times in the past week or more, and with each visit I've felt the same ache to understand, or be understood (by what, I'm at a loss to say).   My thanks to you for having penned it.

lynn