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Early Spring
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February 06, 2010, 04:32:21 PM »
by
Jonathan Bracker
A wild plum tree just beyond the window
gives sway in the wind.
Yesterday a sparrowlike bird
with butter-yellow breast
travelled among the branches;
others like him visited last year.
Pink blossoms with red centers
and pointed brown-red leaves
are being tossed more violently now.
One or two weeks and, then, wild plums
which after a while sidewalk shoes will step on or avoid.
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To purchase a copy of my 73-pp. booklet of poems about Paris, Paris Sketches (Thorp Springs Press, 2005), send $15 and $1 for postage to Jonathan Bracker, 3783 20th St., #5, San Francisco, CA 94110. A few copies are available on Amazon. Sample poems from the collection are on
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Re: Early Spring
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February 07, 2010, 04:02:41 AM »
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silent lotus
dear Jonathan
the setting & the tonality of the hue
is quite captivating
much enjoyed
silent lotus
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February 07, 2010, 12:00:46 PM »
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Jonathan Bracker
Silent Lotus, your words are a great encouragement. You liked some early poems I posted the other day, and I replied that perhaps I would post more of them. They are often simple Nature poems. But this one I wrote yesterday, thank to you.
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To purchase a copy of my 73-pp. booklet of poems about Paris, Paris Sketches (Thorp Springs Press, 2005), send $15 and $1 for postage to Jonathan Bracker, 3783 20th St., #5, San Francisco, CA 94110. A few copies are available on Amazon. Sample poems from the collection are on
www.parispoemsetc.com
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February 07, 2010, 02:28:46 PM »
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David C. Man
Lovely picture of early Spring, Jonathan. For me, I'd finish on something other than the sidewalk shoes. I think that's a little anticlimactic, after the beautiful evocation of nature.
Maybe something a little more in nature's line?
Cheers
David
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February 07, 2010, 11:15:52 PM »
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Rick Stansberger
The sadness of natural beauty that ends up underfoot, like the confetti lilacs become in may. I think the sound of the poem lets down at the end, but not the image.
Rick
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February 08, 2010, 12:22:54 PM »
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cherylleveretteİ
I bet it was a sparrow, with a yellow breast, maybe bigger though. Maybe a robin. Jonathan, I think you do a great job with nature. Unfortunately it's not one of my specialties. Possibly don't appreciate it enough. Like Thoreau, though.
cheryl
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"...I did not know what to say, my mouth had no way with names, my eyes were blind, and something started in my soul, fever or forgotten wings, and I made my own way, deciphering that fire, and I wrote the first faint line, faint, without substance, pure nonsense, pure wisdom...." ~ Pablo Neruda
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February 08, 2010, 07:42:11 PM »
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silent lotus
Quote from: Jonathan Bracker on February 07, 2010, 12:00:46 PM
Silent Lotus, your words are a great encouragement. You liked some early poems I posted the other day, and I replied that perhaps I would post more of them. They are often simple Nature poems. But this one I wrote yesterday, thank to you.
dear Jonathan
i'll keep a keen eye out for more of your nature offerings
my thanks to you for sharing.
smiles
silent lotus
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February 08, 2010, 08:27:26 PM »
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Mikael Heller
enjoyed this, but the last line seems slightly "clumsy"; rearrange it slightly and maybe substitute a word or two... if you like
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