my granpa’s
race

thinks soapy

is near run

has slowed
down
to a gasping
crawl

and when
i follow
his slow
hearse

i’m but
set on
the self same
road
whatever
long

just hope
it passes

decent
pubs

Great! I almost choked on my light ale at the last line. Thanks. Paco

The end stanzas too uncaring to match the rest, to my ear, Milner - maybe not by much tho. A small edit, say from

just hope
it passes

decent
pubs

to

just hope
it passes

by one decent
pub

or something like that might hit the right note, if my own surmise about that note is true. Tom

The problem was in the previous stanza, Tom. Hope it's sorted now.

milner

Neglected to thank you, Paco, and hope the choking wasn't fatal.

Cheers

milner

Yes, I think so, Milner. A fatalism, rather than a callousness, comes through that is in tune with the Soapy view. Tom

That was my intention, Tom, but it was marred by sloppy writing. Glad you drove me to correct that. Thanks

milner