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  Amish Wells, Nebraska
« on: February 07, 2010, 11:24:40 PM » by Rick Stansberger
The longer wind has walked
the stranger its speaking.

So strange when it's
walked outside of land
the things it says to waves
should not be known.

It was wind in savannah
that said to the ape
stand up
bringing the smell of lion
and the start of human.

One of many
(cats will tell you, and dogs)
strange ideas we picked
out of the wind.
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  Re: Amish Wells, Nebraska
« Reply #1 on: February 07, 2010, 11:54:21 PM » by Tom Riordan
Really like this whole idea, and the strange opening S, Rick, and how by the last S you've defined your "strange" not to mean "odd" but to mean "unfamiliar." Tom
The longer wind has walked
the stranger its speaking.

So strange when it's
walked outside of land
the things it says to waves
should not be known.

It was wind in savannah
that said to the ape
stand up
bringing the smell of lion
and the start of human.

One of many
(cats will tell you, and dogs)
strange ideas we picked
out of the wind.
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  Re: Amish Wells, Nebraska
« Reply #2 on: February 08, 2010, 08:24:36 AM » by milner place
Love this, Rick. Though Soapy confides that he thinks it is water that urged the ape to his feet.

Cheers

milner
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  Re: Amish Wells, Nebraska
« Reply #3 on: February 08, 2010, 12:20:00 PM » by cherylleverette
water,  why water to his feet, I wonder.  I first thought of hands and knees and looking over his shoulder.

Rick, I'm only slightly familiar with the Amish and ways of Amish, but I really like what you have going here with 'strange' (thought about ghostly whispers, myself) and ideas in the wind.

cheryl
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  Re: Amish Wells, Nebraska
« Reply #4 on: February 08, 2010, 02:52:22 PM » by Rick Stansberger
Cheryl,

I'm not sure what the title and the poem are doing together.  First came the title, then, right after, the poem.  If there is such an actual place in Nebraska, it isn't there because I chose to write about it.  This one's more mysterious to me than most poems I get.

Rick
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  Re: Amish Wells, Nebraska
« Reply #5 on: February 09, 2010, 02:52:38 AM » by rashmi
was wondering why you gave that title when you talk of winds & evolution - was going to ask what's the connection - it seems it's just as mysterious to you!

like the way you bring in the wind, the ape, the lion, the human, the cat & dog - in the story of evolution - more mysterious!

an intriguing read love the closing lines:

strange ideas we picked
out of the wind.

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  Re: Amish Wells, Nebraska
« Reply #6 on: February 12, 2010, 06:20:12 PM » by Rick Stansberger
was wondering why you gave that title when you talk of winds & evolution - was going to ask what's the connection - it seems it's just as mysterious to you!

like the way you bring in the wind, the ape, the lion, the human, the cat & dog - in the story of evolution - more mysterious!

an intriguing read love the closing lines:

strange ideas we picked
out of the wind.



This is one of those poems that didn't tell me where it was going before it got there.  I like when that happens.  It feels as if I am partnering with something bigger than my own little life.

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