The delicious smoky jazz merging with the passing of years' kindness;  the vivid and beautiful metaphor of the 2nd S; the 3rd S's equally superb metaphor of how she would have plenty of time later to re-live the years; and then finally a sense of the peace of mind to come within herself.

This is a delight, Silent Lotus.  A wonderful read

Full of surprises, some clear and some mysterious, Silent. You're gentle, but you in a good way break us nonetheless. -Tom

This is the poem in your 'journalese' I love.  Renders me silent.  ;)

dear Cheryl

felt it would be nice to include your comments on this poem
that you posted in my journal

they are very much appreciated

smiles
silent lotus
 
Re: Poppy Seeds Walnuts & Raisins
« Reply #219 on: February 08, 2010, 05:19:57 PM » by cherylleverette©

without mention is beautiful.  very sensitive.

are you sure you're a man?   

cheryl

silent,
I like how with the paper rollers it becomes so tangible.   nrw

The contrabass/clarinet combo, Silent, is an obstacle for me, the same way color adjectives like mauve/ecru are. To me they're thin words that don't put their finger on anything because I don't know exactly what they mean, for one thing (I do know "clarinet" but not "contrabass"), so they sound precious. All this says more about me as a reader than about the words or the poem itself, and "contrabass" is probably a very rich image for others, but thought I'd let you know anyway. Tom

Not sure I understand why, but I am extremely moved by this poem. Very nice.
JC

I like the sound of it, and the way the lines slow it down and make it waver in the air.

Dear SL,  a most beautiful stream of thought and wisdom.... would that i could take root and remain gazing...

Somewhat with Tom on contrabass, which (even to my music-book-filled-miind) feels museum-y.... Would you consider the humble "double bass"?

k

Tell you what my poetry prof would tell me......too many unrelated images.  Got instruments, bamboo, roles of pennies, wars..... It sounds delicious, but seems a bit disconnected to me.

Thank you.   d

if only war was more tubular!

dear Desi

i am glad that that pieces of imagery were quite edible
yet that the puzzle did not fall into place for you.

abstract painting is indeed far from a still life.

your professor would have hated me
and i would have smiled

always glad to have your thoughtful eye pass by

many many thankyuus

silent lotus

SL - this was very enjoyable, my favorite is "winter was about to ferried to the mainland" but many lines within this i like -

great images, Silent Lotus.

love the ending on ways of wars.

tiko

This is fine, SL, though I also have a problem with a contrabass having nooky with a clarinet.

Cheers

milner

I love the path here to be raked

Silent,
Just a note though?

While I do want people to bring back old works for another look, I meant one at a time more or less - otherwise I'm in the same boat with only so much time & then missing them again - maybe space it out a little?

Thanks :)

M

you have a uniquely intimate style of expression, dear silent
a joy to read

Stella