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  Climbing The Blockhaus
« on: February 21, 2010, 09:55:58 AM » by marc woodward
Climbing slowly through a horsefly cloud,
swatting away settlers on my sweat.
Weaving for shadows in the August heat;
the sweet relief of a southside tree.
I glance at my own sunshot image
photographed upon the sizzling road:
me and a swarm of irritants like
demons from my own desires.

Further, and the olive groves concede
to wild scrub and wood.
A sparrowhawk flips over and drops
where the Apennines rise,
as I hairpin back and up, up, again.
Pretoro lies below me now, the shade
of its cliff face alleys a memory.
The road is scribbled with chalk:
Forza Di Luca! Di Luca, the local boy.
I reach Passo Lanciano where I could rest
by the sleeping ski-lifts.

But further revolutions call me,
to turn and grind, creaking to the top.
Beech trees overhang for a mile or so
until I graft through their coolness
to the scree covered slopes
and the last open climb to the summit.
This is Merckx's battleground,
up here on a white track in the baking sun,
on the peak of Italy's spine.

I rest my bike beside the sign,
re-hydrate and through the sparse
air gulp the cascading view,
then turn for the downhill run.
Relishing the divine synergy, I wind,
lean and slide through the hairpins.
I feel the air thicken and the temperature rise
and "vai, vai, vai!"
- this time I'm far too fast for the flies.



Marc
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #1 on: February 21, 2010, 10:03:50 AM » by Tom Riordan
exhilarating ending, Marc, and a great read all the way through.

one distraction in here, maybe just to a fart like me, the variety of dash styles:

where the Apennines rise
-as I hairpin back and up, up, again.
Pretoro lies below me now - the shade
of its cliff face alleys a memory.
The road is scribbled with chalk-
Forza Di Luca! Di Luca, the local boy.

Especially after the space-hyphen-space dash above, the mark at "chalk-" reads like a hyphen and creates a moment of confusion.

The nitling aside, great writing. Tom
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #2 on: February 21, 2010, 12:37:13 PM » by David C. Man
Yep, this is a good one, Marc. The only thing I don't like when I read it now is the last line, which seems a bit naff - especially that final exclamation mark!

Cheers

David
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #3 on: February 22, 2010, 03:56:38 AM » by marc woodward
Thanks David and Tom - all good points. I had misgivings about too many hyphens and the last exclamation mark, so both fixed now.
Cheers,
Marc
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #4 on: February 22, 2010, 11:20:00 AM » by Tom Riordan
As a youth, spent time in this area with a friend from outside Pescara, remember driving up and up and around and around on some mountain road like this, watching the centures fall away and the black-clad women getting shorter and shorter, in search of some special wine she know of at a farm near the top. As we got close, asking the help of everyone we saw, my friend Basi's 20th century Pescara dialect and the villagers' dialect were nearly incomprehensible. But yes, we got the wine and were able to fill up the wicker-bottom vat housed in the spare tire of our Fiat!
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #5 on: February 22, 2010, 12:06:00 PM » by marc woodward
Hi Tom,
it's a beautiful area, off the beaten tourist trail; I'm fortunate enough to spend a little time there. A bit of a killer area on the bike 'though!
Ciao,
Marco!
www.pretorovacanze.it/images/pretoro_montagna.jpg
http://www.self-catering-breaks.com/images/property_pictures/24539_1243432457.jpg

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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #6 on: February 22, 2010, 12:25:58 PM » by Tom Riordan
Magnificent pic
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #7 on: February 22, 2010, 12:58:14 PM » by David C. Man
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #8 on: February 22, 2010, 01:08:23 PM » by cherylleverette
This is such an interesting thread and the poem is great, so sorry just now reading it all.  I love the part when the bike enters, seems the entire poem was easier for me to read after the last stanza.  Think that some sort of odd female something or other with a prejudice though.

great, great job, marc,
cheryl
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #9 on: February 23, 2010, 04:53:28 AM » by marc woodward
Thanks all, but sadly I can't claim credit for the photo - I lifted it from the web. Still it shows Pretoro with its 'cliff face alleys'. Looks cold doesn't it? It's bloody hot in august 'though!
Marc
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #10 on: February 24, 2010, 03:16:35 PM » by Tom Riordan
to picks.
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #11 on: February 24, 2010, 09:57:19 PM » by Lynn Doiron
I'm a sucker for details and nature, sweat and flies, the pay-off = terrific.  Well worth the ride.

ld
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  Re: Climbing The Blockhaus
« Reply #12 on: March 07, 2010, 01:19:24 PM » by marc woodward
Hey, thanks for the 'pick' Tom, sorry I missed it earlier!

Marc
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