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  Osprey
« on: May 04, 2010, 09:28:10 AM » by Ken Robson
I watched you scavenging today
for yesterday's dead bass
bobbing on the morning swell,
one milky eye fixed skyward.

Plucked from the river bed
you raised him up like Lazarus
and bore him off as if he lived
and you would kill again.

Teach me your sleight of hand.
I, too, would settle for the dead
if I could carry them to some high tree
and wake them there.
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #1 on: May 04, 2010, 10:19:11 AM » by Raven Marin
As opposed to waking them where?

-Raven
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« Reply #2 on: May 04, 2010, 10:22:03 AM » by jamesthomashoward
A powerful piece, sir. I'm not sure that 'prayers unheard' deserves its own stanza, and it veers a bit towards a cliche for me; but that final image, a sort of upperworld instead of an underworld, is both haunting and delicious.

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« Reply #3 on: May 04, 2010, 10:30:30 AM » by milner place
Strong, Ken. Agree with James that you could lose the 'prayer unheard'.

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« Reply #4 on: May 04, 2010, 10:34:35 AM » by Tom Riordan
...and the "instead"! Cheapens a great poem, Ken. S2 hits me upside the head, as do the first four words of last L. Tom
Quote from: Ken Robson on May 04, 2010, 09:28:10 AM
I watched you scavenging today
for yesterday's dead bass
bobbing on the morning swell,
one milky eye fixed skyward,

prayers unheard.

You were convincing--
raising him like Lazarus
to bear him off as if he lived
and you had killed again.

Teach me your sleight of hand.
I, too, would settle for the dead
if I could carry them to some high tree
and wake them there--instead.
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« Reply #5 on: May 04, 2010, 10:39:05 AM » by jamesthomashoward
Ah yes, meant to mention that 'instead'; agree with Tom. It's not a heavily rhymed poem, and the juxtaposition is inferred I think.
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« Reply #6 on: May 04, 2010, 10:51:10 AM » by Ken Robson
James, Milner, Tom--I agree with you all! Thank you for the read and edits.

                                           Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #7 on: May 04, 2010, 10:55:51 AM » by Ken Robson
Quote the Raven, "no instead."

                    Thanks,

                           Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #8 on: May 04, 2010, 10:57:43 AM » by jamesthomashoward
Really strong read now, ken. It's like a surrealist advert for recycling.
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« Reply #9 on: May 04, 2010, 10:58:13 AM » by Tom Riordan
Three fingers to lips!
Quote from: Ken Robson on May 04, 2010, 09:28:10 AM
I watched you scavenging today
for yesterday's dead bass
bobbing on the morning swell,
one milky eye fixed skyward.

You were convincing--
raising him like Lazarus
to bear him off as if he lived
and you had killed again.

Teach me your sleight of hand.
I, too, would settle for the dead
if I could carry them to some high tree
and wake them there.
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« Reply #10 on: May 04, 2010, 11:15:42 AM » by Tiko Lewis
enjoyed this, Ken. 
personally enjoy it much
more without S2.  not that
S2 is not good, but i like it
more going from S1 to S3.

again, enjoyed the write. 
wonderful ending for me!

thanks,

tiko
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« Reply #11 on: May 04, 2010, 12:04:14 PM » by Sue Lozynskyj
This very tight now Ken, Good write, and a pick for me.

Quote from: Ken Robson on May 04, 2010, 09:28:10 AM
I watched you scavenging today
for yesterday's dead bass
bobbing on the morning swell,
one milky eye fixed skyward.

Plucked from the river bed
you raised him up like Lazarus
and bore him off as if he lived
and you would kill again.

Teach me your sleight of hand.
I, too, would settle for the dead
if I could carry them to some high tree
and wake them there.
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Chance favours the prepared mind: Louis Pasteur
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« Reply #12 on: May 04, 2010, 12:05:27 PM » by Ken Robson
James, Tom, Tiko


Thank you. Tiko, to me S2 seems integral
but you know me--slash and burn forever! I'll
think on it.

                 Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #13 on: May 04, 2010, 12:08:22 PM » by Ken Robson
Thanks Sue!

               Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #14 on: May 04, 2010, 12:09:22 PM » by milner place
And thanks, Ken, for the Lazarus bit - I got the poem just posted 'not a happy bunny' from that.

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« Reply #15 on: May 04, 2010, 12:14:24 PM » by Ken Robson
Milner,

I'm afraid I don't understand your last message.

                     Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #16 on: May 06, 2010, 09:48:39 AM » by MichelleBethCronk
Ken,

I believe that Milner meant that you inspired a poem that he just posted...

wondered about adding "him" to the below line

"and you would kill him again."

but it is a small thing - the poem is excellent and the ending thought profound - Michelle

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« Reply #17 on: May 06, 2010, 09:54:25 AM » by StellaR


great to see your work on the Front Page, Ken!
congratulations. love this poem


Stella
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« Reply #18 on: May 06, 2010, 09:58:23 AM » by Sue Lozynskyj
Lovely to see this on the front page.  Well done Ken, Great pick Michelle.
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« Reply #19 on: May 06, 2010, 09:59:00 AM » by Tom Riordan
Contrats, Ken! Tom
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« Reply #20 on: May 06, 2010, 12:41:11 PM » by Ken Robson
Michelle,

Thank you for your comments and your pick!

                               Ken

Stella, Sue , Tom--

Thanks for helping me make this
a better poem and for your good
wishes.

                         Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #21 on: May 06, 2010, 02:41:33 PM » by cherylleverette
Congratulations Ken.  This is really good.  A joy to read.          cheryl




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« Reply #22 on: May 06, 2010, 03:19:19 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Stunner of an end on this one!  And stunning to find it on front page!  Congrats!
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« Reply #23 on: May 06, 2010, 08:36:19 PM » by Ken Robson
CA and Lynn---

I'm glad you like the memory. I was fishing
on the St/ John's River inWashington County
Maine. He stooped ten feet in front of me
tyalons ready to pluck.

                        Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #24 on: May 07, 2010, 02:38:44 PM » by jamesthomashoward
a great choice!
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« Reply #25 on: May 07, 2010, 04:29:44 PM » by Ken Robson
Thanks, James.

               Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #26 on: May 08, 2010, 07:49:51 AM » by silent lotus
dear Ken

it seems your poem was submitted and went to the front page
so quickly that only an osprey could have been that swift.

your pen here deftly sketches the mciro, the macro and primordial.

and nice to read that Maine was so expansive for you
and now for the world as well.

nice poeming

silent lotus
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« Reply #27 on: May 08, 2010, 09:56:11 AM » by Ken Robson
SL-grazie tante!

                  ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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« Reply #28 on: May 08, 2010, 10:16:20 AM » by silent lotus


This is a copyrighted image from my good friend/neighbor and photographer Jack Lenk
taken in Africa.

you will find a few of these amazing African Eagle images on his website
where you can order original prints

choose Galleries -Travel & Environment-Lake Baringo
http://www.lenkphoto.com
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« Reply #29 on: May 08, 2010, 10:51:39 AM » by Tiko Lewis
congrats, Ken.

good to see this on the front page.

an excellent write.

tiko
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« Reply #30 on: May 08, 2010, 03:56:22 PM » by Ken Robson
Many thanks, Tiko.

                    Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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