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  Abby
« on: July 28, 2010, 05:45:08 AM » by Pam Scobie
She stood below us, looking up.
White face, dark glasses, tilted chin.
"Is there owt you want? I'm going to the shop."
Oh, thin. Too thin.

She drew the shades off, offered up her smile:
Perky, imploring, tremulous.
The wild, white face of an exhausted child.
She wanted nothing but to be of use,
To anyone. To us.

She wanted not to be "that dippy girl,
One of the crazy crew that squat next door",
Damaged and damned. Frail as a paper doll,
She offered him herself one night last year.
"I'll make a meal and we can go to bed.
I've always fancied you," that's what she said.

He, tickled pink, resisting, could not see
It was her only currency.
I, anxious for my own survival,
Recognized only hunger for approval.

Lofty now, vantaged on the topmost step,
I reach to drop coins in the palm stretched up.
"A bottle of dry white - screw top - please, Pet."
She totters off - that cocky, knock-kneed strut
On legs like straws - and she is singing, singing - yet
I long, oh how I long to rise and call
The truth: we have no blessings we can spare.
We have no wisdom to bestow like pearls.
We have done nothing to admire.
We have lived longer, that is all.
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #1 on: July 28, 2010, 07:44:57 AM » by Tom Riordan
Pam, enjoyed this very much. Reminds me of one of my favorite poems, "Manuelzinho" by Eliz. Bishop. Tom
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #2 on: July 28, 2010, 07:46:25 AM » by silent lotus
dear Pam

curious about

owt you want ?


a search came up with

dialect England
variant ofAUGHT


Owt
Acronym   Definition
OWT   Omega World Travel (travel agency)
OWT   One World Trust (London, UK)
OWT   Overweight (finance)
OWT   Old Wives Tale
OWT   Operation Warrior Trainer (US Army)
OWT   Organisation, Work & Technology
OWT   One World Tree (genealogy)
OWT   Orthogonal Wavelet Transform
OWT   One World Telecom
OWT   Offshore Wind Turbine (EU)
OWT   One-Way-Travel
OWT   Oily Waste Transfer
OWT   Operator Work Time
OWT   One Way Transfer
OWT   Over Weight Truck
OWT   Oconee Waste Transport, Inc. (Watkinsville, GA)
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #3 on: July 28, 2010, 11:36:55 AM » by Pam Scobie
Ah, Silent Lotus, tha mun visit North o' England. You were reet fust time. Owt means anything.
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #4 on: July 29, 2010, 05:12:47 AM » by Pam Scobie
Thanks, Tom, I'll look her up. Pam
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #5 on: July 29, 2010, 05:31:31 AM » by Pam Scobie
PS Your list of abbreviations is a poem in itself!
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #6 on: July 31, 2010, 11:47:31 AM » by Rick Stansberger
Nice portrait.

Rick
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #7 on: August 01, 2010, 04:37:50 AM » by Pam Scobie
Thanks, Rick!
Pam
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« Reply #8 on: August 01, 2010, 01:17:30 PM » by MichelleBethCronk
wonder if a contraction in the last line?

"We have lived longer, that is all."    into

We have lived longer, that's all.

lovely piece.....I would have picked it if it wasn't already here.

M

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  Re: Abby
« Reply #9 on: August 02, 2010, 04:59:10 AM » by Pam Scobie
Hello, Michelle. Let's give it a go:

The truth: we have no blessings we can spare.
We have no wisdom to bestow, like pearls.
We have done nothing to admire.
We have lived longer, that's all.

I like it! It's more mournful, resigned, the first way. This way is almost flippant, but despairing too. Thank you!
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #10 on: August 02, 2010, 07:41:40 AM » by Dax








Welcome, Pam.

Thank you.


d






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  Re: Abby
« Reply #11 on: August 02, 2010, 10:19:54 AM » by Pam Scobie
Thanks, Dax!
Pam
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #12 on: August 02, 2010, 12:04:12 PM » by Lynn Doiron
fine write, pam.

ld
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #13 on: August 03, 2010, 06:05:46 AM » by Pam Scobie
Thanks, Lynn!
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  Re: Abby
« Reply #14 on: August 25, 2010, 01:52:09 PM » by Lynn Doiron
I must send this around for another read.  And add "Really" to my earlier "fine write" comment.

ld
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