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This one fairly shouts it's point and I'm listening. Yes.

I can see that restaurant now filled with lovelies and their money men.

Dax, your original and unique voice is always rewarding to read. Thank you for sharing

Thank you, L

Good to hear from you again, my pleasure to be sure!


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A really sparkling read, Dax, thanks.

Favorite lines:

"A-head, then, on an empty wallet"

"playboys and bottles of plasma"

One expression stumps me a bit - help, anyone?: "that, which would have most down as pickpockets and charlatans".

Tom

I inserted [people] between most and down and it clicked for me.

Ah! I see. I get it now. Thanks, Lavonne. Tom

Dax,

love it.  as stated, your unique voice and
pen are always rewarding. 

it's good to have you posting again.

tiko

Like this -especially those first two sentences - M

Dax,  a delight to find your polished jaded voice at work.

Wonderful ease-ful complexity of syntax too.  Maybe pushes a wee bit far in the last S, with the "that" ..... "this"?

A flock of guilty pleasurses is a glorious image, i'm thinking a cross between peacocks and vultures   :)

k

Thank you, everyone. My pleasure, to be sure.

ciao, ciao



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this is a pick for me.
love it.

tiko

Stupendissimo.

Well picked, Tiko.

milner

loved the last line:

poet, save me from myself.

indeed!

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Congrax, Dax! Tom

The greatest of picks, Lavonne. Ole, Don Ricardo.

g/m

congrats, Dax.  great to find this on the front page.

tiko

Have enjoyed this all over again.  And will again through the week! 

ld

dax

very intriguing, for me puts me right in a back both at a speakeasy with mellow light and a low roar.  the intricacies couple so well with the voice.  a very enjoyable front page, congrats!  lawrence

Dax, this has kept my interest with every read, every run, every duck in its shadow.

larry