i will not
write
of war

that bestiality
of man

for death
squats
on my shoulder
so

i’ll sing
of leaves bursting
with spring
and of a summer’s lust
for sun
on poppies
that will never know
the thunder
from bewildered
guns

i’ll miracle
the rain
to wine
until the fall
of night

brings out
the bats
to flirt
with shooting stars

fireflies
go waltzing
into hush
of oaks

let me be the first to applaud this piece, milner
it thrills the tongue to speak these words

Stella

very powerful and well executed.


james

That last S most lovely, Milner. Tom

Wow, you did it.  That is what we are all tryng to do.  Yes.   Yes. 

love the title - M

You've got the sound down pat, just plain lovely.

This is so lovely Milner, My priviledge to pick it.

I have a couple of suggestions

nix "of a" from here...and of a summer’s lust
 and "the" and "spouted" from here...

the thunder
spouted
from bewildered
guns

Stella, what s wondrous compliment, 'it thrills the tongue'. As you know, I've been working in this form for a while now, and it's so rewarding to feel that like a carpenter I'm getting a degree of proficiency with my tools. Many thanks

milner

Milner, very much enjoyed this - great feel about it. The lines in this unique compared to other writing:

i’ll miracle
the rain
to wine
until the fall
of night

Awesome.

Thanks, James, Tom.

Wow to that comment, Quentin.

Now to Michelle, Larry, Michelle, Casey, and to Sue for the pick, my gratitiude.

All this applause from those I so respect is very warming.

Cheers

milner

a wonderful write! 
i add my applause!

tiko

how well this reads, milner! 

very much admire how you wove poppies into the S with bewildered guns; the power to miracle the rain; and just about everything about this poem.

the final S -- i like for how it ends on the strength of that oak.  For me, there may be a little push to the wording that seems maybe poeticized ... then again, you well know how often I miss on these early reads and over-analyzing thoughts -- so feel free to ignore.

lynn

let me bow down & kiss your ring!