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  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #15 on: August 21, 2010, 06:20:48 AM » by silent lotus
dear Ken

a
tender coupling of soles & soul

a moment of the monumental

a warm smile
silent lotus
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  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #16 on: August 21, 2010, 07:51:27 AM » by Ken Robson
SL--which version do you swim with?
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

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  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #17 on: August 21, 2010, 10:13:30 AM » by milner place
Excellent, Ken. I preferred 'thrummimg' as it had more of a faint sound, and also more movement, for me, to go with the oar blades.

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  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #18 on: August 21, 2010, 10:32:10 AM » by Ken Robson
Quote from: milner place on August 21, 2010, 10:13:30 AM
Excellent, Ken. I preferred 'thrummimg' as it had more of a faint sound, and also more movement, for me, to go with the oar blades.

milner
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #19 on: August 21, 2010, 10:34:04 AM » by Ken Robson
Milner,

I agree--thrumming has both more movement
and onomatopoeia. Thanks for looking in.

                                 Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #20 on: August 21, 2010, 05:11:03 PM » by Tom Riordan
I really like this wording, Ken. Punctuation -- hyphen, dash, two periods -- seems excessive somehow. Tom
Quote from: Ken Robson on August 20, 2010, 04:25:19 AM
Cedar shore-birds
feather oars--

mallards thrumming.
overhead.
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  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #21 on: August 21, 2010, 08:05:30 PM » by Ken Robson
Well me too now that you
mention it thanks tom ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #22 on: August 21, 2010, 08:19:21 PM » by silent lotus
~

Sculls On The Charles

Cedar shore-birds
feather oars

overhead
mallards thrumming

~
Dear Ken
this is the version that brings me the most smiles
silent lotus
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« Reply #23 on: August 22, 2010, 09:59:48 AM » by Ken Robson
Thank you SL! Bonjour!

                    Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #24 on: August 24, 2010, 03:37:25 PM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie

Sculls On The Charles

Cedar shore-birds
feather oars

overhead
mallards thrumming

And I am  right there in the moment. Lovely.  Maggie
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  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #25 on: August 24, 2010, 05:10:05 PM » by Ken Robson
What a nice voice to hear!!!Given the dismal state of our team
and the nauseous re-acquisition of Damon, it  is sheer pleasure to hear from where-have-you-been Maggie. It's
time for a party, a reunion or some such rag-time event.
Give me a call for auld lange syne (860-233-1554)
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #26 on: August 24, 2010, 06:11:15 PM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie
Will do that very thing. How's your Thursday looking?
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« Reply #27 on: August 25, 2010, 07:53:46 AM » by Ken Robson
Thursday night after 8 looks AOK
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #28 on: August 25, 2010, 01:06:40 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Gliding along through Submits, I found this lovely and decided a move was in order.

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  Re: Sculls on the Charles
« Reply #29 on: August 25, 2010, 03:13:16 PM » by Ken Robson
Lynn,

As always, thruming with you
is a pleasure!

                        Ken
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The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
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