hi,

i’m a good Catholic  
especially during Kwanzaa
and baseball season.

i don’t split bagels in New York
because splitting is taxed.

i like long walks in libraries

and donuts.
           whenever.


making dreams come true
one personal message at a
time,


             -felix




P.S.
the pink shirt is not my choosing-
who cares that it’s tucked in;
my shoes are athletic.

Tiko, I'm excited about this "genre," what opportunities and freedom for portraits. This one a gas. Tom

I love that last line and thought tiko - this is interesting definately - M

Yes, Tiko.

milner

thanks, guys.  was trying
out something different.
glad it worked.

tiko

Tiko, I love this.  Couple of suggestions where it loses its energy.
One's a major shift in the last stanza you might consider. Maggie

hi,

i’m a good Catholic 
especially during Kwanzaa
and baseball season.

i don’t split bagels in New York
because splitting is taxed.

i like long walks in libraries

and donuts.
           whenever.


making dreams come true
one personal message at a
time,


             -felix




P.S.
the pink shirt is not my choosing—
who cares that it’s tucked in
my athletic shoes.

Love it, tiko.  I want to socially network with this guy; he had me at "long walks in libraries"  -- terrific.  And the 'my shoes are athletic' suits those long walks between corridors of books.  Much enjoyed.

Maggie,

thanks for the read and input. i've taken
one of the changes, but feel the change in
final stanza moves away from my intent.
thanks, as always.

Lynn,

thanks very much. :)

tiko

want to cross-reference your last line with Doris's

Toes went
to an exhibition

Foot stays
on the mantel

Funny.

surprised to find this here.
thanks to the editor.

tiko