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  training day
« on: August 30, 2010, 11:19:12 PM » by Tiko Lewis



the
flame
shall
not
chase
the
moth

nor
will
the
flower 
bloom
in
winter

tarry

for
the
torpid
hand
breaches
the
bustle





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...i don't eat jelly beans afterward.

  Re: training day
« Reply #1 on: September 01, 2010, 09:12:19 PM » by Tom Riordan

the
flame
shall
not
chase
the
moth

nor
will
the
flower 
bloom
in
winter

tarry

for
the
torpid
hand
absolves
the
bustle

In this case, for me, Tiko, not knowing which meaning of "bustle" to read is an obstacle. Tom
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  Re: training day
« Reply #2 on: September 01, 2010, 09:23:02 PM » by Tiko Lewis
maybe the problem is absolve,
I think.

tiko
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...i don't eat jelly beans afterward.

  Re: training day
« Reply #3 on: September 01, 2010, 09:43:39 PM » by Tiko Lewis
replaced absolved with breaches.
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  Re: training day
« Reply #4 on: September 02, 2010, 12:32:41 PM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie
Some messing, Tiko. Went right to thinking flowers do bloom in the winter depending on your hemispheric address.  Maggie

the
flame
does
not
chase
the
moth

but
a flower
will
bloom
in the odd
winter

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