a day in a different world—the sun raining its dry mist
on the occupation of the hour—the first different day—
the first day after death bent the shape of existence,
a day without sound for all its flagellating noise.

a day to beg away from. to exorcize. to slay.

Maggie, I like the whole idea of the first day of a new existence - what it's like, can it be rejected? Tom

typo in title?

don't get to read your work often enough
you've handled this subject qute adroitly
great writing, maggie


Stella

Maggie,

I like this.  Eden right after the fall.

Rick

maggie, enjoyed this as much as the other from this series. this was great, the ending built up a solid place to leave the reader

Thanks for the reads everyone. The fun part comes next. What to cut? Maggie