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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #180 on: January 19, 2010, 03:56:39 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Reasons for Change in the Appearance of Swells

1.   They mature and grow up
2.   The big ones are hired thugs called in by shores when shores are in want of massages
3.   The small ones are puny with age
4.   The small ones are on the fade or not quite made
5.   The normal swells are actors and consequently abnormal
6.   The humongous ones work out at a gym on the far side
7.   The gray-green ones drank too much Spanish Moss wine at high tide
8.   The taupe ones are pretending to be patent leather handbags and shoes
9.   The pink ones are on the rag
10.    The frothy ones are having bad hair moments
11.    The quieter are wishing for a moment of any kind
12.    The first one is only first for a splash
13.    The last one is last until it is first and last lasts for a very long time (a.k.a. #3 and #4)
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #181 on: January 20, 2010, 05:28:46 PM » by Rick Stansberger
I like this.  The end is a little unravelly for me, but I love your imagination.

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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #182 on: January 29, 2010, 03:50:11 PM » by Lynn Doiron
*Reversal of words in lines of Denise Levertov’s The Closed World

Burned but wavered eye
minds glare’s indifferent dry hills,
the over-swept darkness and silver,
last drought long after when.

Shut are doors; windows
are blinds – out days, in days;
resurrection and passion
enact wind and light.

Inheritors, the young.
Have I months for this
threshold, the understill here,
dwellings in snake-houses?

~

Denise Levertov, The Closed World, from The Sorrow Dance, copyright 1963, Library of Congress Catalog Card Number: 67-14561. 

I can’t copy and paste Levertov’s poem, The Closed World, here due to copyright infringement.  But I thought I might paste her opening stanza for comparisons with my end stanza after typing each line from end to beginning, from last line to first.  Her opening S follows:

The house-snake dwells here still
under the threshold
but for months I have not seen it
nor its young, the inheritors.

The exercise is one I came across some few years ago via poets.org and poem-a-day challenges in April of that year.  It’s interesting, the play of words and meaning and how tweaks and manipulation reshape and reform into something all together different.  It’s like working with a palm full of clay or play-dough; one minute a horse, the next minute a house. 
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #183 on: February 25, 2010, 05:44:13 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Villanelle (found today while looking for an accidental heart)

Wings of dragons, grasshoppers, flies, gnats, bees, et al,
legs of horses, fins of fish, paws of cats, bears,
 power the twigs that tremble the leaves Spring, Summer, Fall.

Cower bad, kiss the kind, the Great White or narwhal.
Robins, cardinals, yellow finches – life of sea and air,
wings of dragons, grasshoppers, flies, gnats, bees, et al,   

rest when rest invites and dance when pan flutes call.
Heifers, Holsteins, llamas, yaks, geldings and roan mare,
power the twigs that tremble the leaves Spring, Summer, Fall.

Yoke the songs of souls from beings large and small,
from the dead and from the living: snails, ants, spider lairs,
wings of dragons, grasshoppers, flies, gnats, bees, et al.

Nectar the signs of peace: sweeten the lure of truce.
O! elephants of India, O! Guatemalan sloth so fair,
power the twigs that tremble the leaves Spring, Summer, Fall.

I will letter your music with squid ink, post pleas to forestall;
we spell our brews in the stratosphere:
wings of dragons, grasshoppers, flies, gnats, bees, et al   
power the twigs that tremble each leaf -- springs, summers, falls.
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #184 on: February 27, 2010, 03:35:28 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Tsunami Watch, 2-27-10

It’s terrible vast
this gray everything
cut in half
by a rubbed line of thick against thin

A raven took the highway
not eight yards from the glass
and now nine pelicans can’t
keep the straight path,
drop like hyphens between words of air
but they try
they do try to realign

Where the sheen is on the water
there’s a split in heaven I can’t find,
a blue seam too shy to make itself seen.

I watch south and west
for a swell to appear
like a rubble-dusted torso
might make itself known from the rest.

I watch the palapas below,
settle umbrella shapes to mind
lest the wave does come
and they go.

There are no trawlers out today,
no pangas, no sails.  Just the raven.
The broken hyphens of struggling birds.


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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #185 on: February 27, 2010, 05:40:11 PM » by cherylleverette
Right as I was reading this poem, I heard my mom tell someone on the phone she was watching the tsunami on tv.  Didn't even know there was one.  I'm so bad about watching the news.  I can't imagine REALLY watching one.

I love the imagery in this poem, very moving, just as a tsunami is.

cheryl
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #186 on: February 27, 2010, 06:53:47 PM » by Lynn Doiron
;) -- I can't quite imagine watching one either!  The effect here (according to various tsunami links I've been watching and alert information), or 'amplitude' wouldn't have been much -- I think I figured 22" or so if I calculated the cm's to inches right.  I may, in fact, have watched the tsunami wave as it came to shore, but I couldn't differentiate it from the other breakers.  And let me say, I am glad of that.  A huge tsunami would wipe out the little fishing village of Popotla on the point down below the hill where I live.  Not to mention the baja coast and so much more. 

Ah, but I ramble.  Maybe I'll post this poem in Submit.  Maybe there's something of it enough to post ...  Thanks for your note, c. 

ld
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #187 on: June 07, 2010, 05:04:05 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Small Birds

They sit on brick columns at intervals
in the brick wall.  Then, like our eyes
automatically blink, they fly.

Zip-zip around the plum in full leaf
that stands hardly a yard from the white-spiked iron topping the wall  with its padlocked gates.
Up-down-up-down in front of trellised grapes.

They seem happy, if undecided.  I write
zip-zip with some trouble striking the “z”,
striking the Shift more than once.  When I look up
they’re back.  I write.  They’re gone.  One east.
One south.  Everything’s moving, nodding. 
I seem happy, if undecided. 

The doves won’t arrive until late afternoon;
they’ve promised further cooing.
I pick at a scab on the back of my hand.  Dogs bark
in other yards.  The small birds must have found
another column out of view for take offs
and landings.  Good.  I need to concentrate, fly
west, into some better words.
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  Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #188 on: June 07, 2010, 10:59:11 PM » by Michelle Beth Cronk
Small birds is a little rough, but very good - a little trimming & pruning should make it a gem - I'll look forward to the day it flits over into submit - M
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #189 on: June 10, 2010, 04:20:53 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Documentation

A blink of the streetlamp.  The yellow
bowl of light deciding to stay or go.
Pale gray, morning’s marine layer.
Black powerlines.  One dove and two wild
canaries perched, a half-dozen pigeons
unperched, wheeling.

I’m a voyeur, casually aware of light
in a high yellow bowl now
steadily out.  If I went out,
stayed out, who would document
this?  The undecided, decided.
The unasked, asked.
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #190 on: June 10, 2010, 04:22:20 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Small birds is a little rough, but very good - a little trimming & pruning should make it a gem - I'll look forward to the day it flits over into submit - M

thanks, michelle.  not sure when i'll get back to it -- but some thoughts there to rehash.
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #191 on: August 12, 2010, 07:44:50 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Home is Where

In quiet night, on covered shucks of old corn, where skins shine and slow, beyond flaps of woven doors wind shuffles through like sleepwalking ghosts, a girl marks a shuck with blood, drifting who she was from within like a whorled dust print of her after.  After, folding this evidence into a letter she will keep in a pouch of other skin.  Months, and a baby comes.  Years, more suckling young.  The shuck is dust and the well is enameled with mineral crusts where they would take water, wearing woven doors for warmth.  You’ve seen her again folding coins in shadows, wearing a star on her cheek where a bone splintered through, and turquoise boots with silver-worked toes, buying mangoes at the market, on a bench waiting for the bus, coming out of the dentist’s office.  She’s wearing a new crooked tooth.  She’s wearing a hand on her arm and you move to let them through.  And in the quiet dark, on a shelf long with neglect and casual abuse by spiders and cats, laden with clay and sculptured skulls wearing bridal veils and stovepipe hats, you find her again.   And the tooth you know by its angle; and the fracturing star mended to hang like a lantern highlight on her cheekbone is catacombed by petals, through which she watches your passage—you cannot look and cannot look away—even home, where doors are wood and water spills from the faucet, she watches your passage.
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #192 on: August 20, 2010, 08:58:50 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks
#191 - so good.  Makes me feel connected to every woman.
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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #193 on: December 11, 2010, 11:22:21 AM » by silent lotus
Thank you, kind sir!  I've posted today's installement on the Irene blog at
          http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/2009/07/25/fictionalizing-facts-inventing-others/
and I'm posting it below as well.  May not be the best place to post in Journalese, as I'm looking for any glitches or confusion that may be in need of edits.  But the work is what I think of as 'Irene Journaling' and so I post here.  This entry has more to do with process; I have no idea if it has any "interest" value . . . ah well.

Fictionalizing Facts, Inventing Others

What began as one story meant to fill out the true life of a true person who lived recklessly, a dare-devil by all accounts, and died young – became more than one story.  

What is or was “true,” I came to realize, can be no more than fuzzy at best.  Take me, for instance: How I remember the events of yesterday or a year ago or the sequence of climbing out of bed and finding the coffee filters to brew a first pot of coffee a few hours ago are fuzzy.   Recollections get warped.  Did the sun wake me?  Or a barking dog?  Did I fill the coffeepot reservoir first, then put the filter into the basket – or vice versa?  Did I spill coffee grounds on the counter because I glanced up to see why the neighbor’s dog was barking?  Or was that when the wayward bird thumped into the window?  Does it matter?  Not really.  

What came to matter in the “one” story, Irene’s “true life” story, was the need to write the resemblance of a life lived true to itself, to herself.  And if my own moment-to-moment life experiences were difficult to pin down, how could I possibly capture and pen to paper the moments of Irene Lowe?  

Thus the invention of Irene Johns.  

And if a wayward bird was the cause of spilled coffee grounds in my kitchen this morning, what cause or causes may have brought a vigorous and headstrong girl such as Irene Lowe to such a life as she lived, such fortunes and misfortunes?  

Thus the invented lives of characters to surround my fictional heroine, Irene Parilee Johns.  Thus an invented grandniece to rediscover a secreted-away and long-dead aunt.  Thus an imagined Depression Era venue on Coney Island called Poseidon Park.  Thus any number of stories “true” to this writer’s imagination:  invented lives and invented places, invented events, rivalries and affections.    

No evidence of coffee grounds on my counter remains.  Only the memory, only the reconstruction of that recent incident in my thinking is yet with me.  And, other than these words recording that event, the mishap will be forgotten.  I believe wayward events happen everywhere and all the time.  Beyond the reach of the Hubble telescope, a speck of matter moves.  A few inches under the earth, worms are making choices about which way to circumvent a pebble lodged in their paths.  Imagination carries my beliefs, my “inventions” of what I believe to be “true.”

Thus The True Life Adventures of Irene in White Tights became.  It is what it is – inspired by a real life and true to my imaginings about the nature of we human beings – regardless of the century we are born into, or will be born into.    




dear Lynn

this was a good read with my decaf coffee grinds this morning.

many thankyuuus

silent lotus


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  Re: Writing in the Month of Jane
« Reply #194 on: January 15, 2011, 12:57:21 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Scent of a Rock

This one takes two hands
to lift close enough to lick,
to sample for salt, smell
the worlds where it’s been.
Sedimentary, metamorphic,
pebbling through striate generations
of forest and ocean floors,
speaking in steam and ash
of tours taken and planned.

I imagine moss waiting
for ferns and the calcium bones
of small rabbits once furred
in the shadows of grasses,
tippets worn by ladies
tucked into trunks and forgotten,
rolled into compacted dust
at sites on the outskirts of towns
long-swallowed by earth
birthed warm again, rising,
rounding, fracturing to round
anew with erosion, to sit these
weighted hands with maps
of lost rivers, veldts, tracts,
marrows of stems and bones.

 

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