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  communion
« on: September 14, 2007, 02:08:50 PM » by Dale McLain
What of our offerings, the beautiful,
and the profane? We come together
at this altar, this place of desire
and peril, seeking, saving, holding
dear the wounds and roses we have gathered.

There are prayers for illumination,
another for the falling of a veil.
We remember a soft inflection
that brings a river of regret,
a certain shade of blue, a cornflower

glance across an infinite prairie.
We bear them up, our own relics,
the mundane, the nearly grand,
the hoped for, the abandoned.
These are our moments, pale petals

of open flesh we tender over
fraught waters. Often it is a cast
of light or a scent of limes and tallow
that brings us to our knees, some snare
that falls into our path and conjures

an hour when we rested in the hand
of mercy. There now, we find a way
to sleep and dream these things,
that we might breathe and endure
in this thin and unforgiving air.
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« Reply #1 on: September 14, 2007, 06:16:54 PM » by Buddah_Moskowitz
This was very beautiful.  I especially liked
Quote
an hour when we rested in the hand of mercy
.

Thanks, Moskowitz
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« Reply #2 on: September 15, 2007, 04:44:08 PM » by Michael Firewalker
a psalm of truth and grace, sung from the deepest place within a human soul, and sung clearly, and with power, so that light has been divided from darkness, and things wounded and broken can find new hope to heal...

michael
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« Reply #3 on: September 20, 2007, 11:25:34 PM » by Rick Stansberger
It's rare that a poem succeeds in taking on the human condition -- or am I completely off, here.  You have a good central metaphor in the ritual of communion, and you deviate from it so that it doesn't get tired carrying all that weight.
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"I wonder why. I wonder why. / I wonder why I wonder / I wonder why I wonder why / I wonder why I wonder!"
---From the scientist Richard Feynman's childhood writings

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« Reply #4 on: September 21, 2007, 12:33:34 AM » by Dale McLain
Thank you alll for your most kind words!
take care~dale
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« Reply #5 on: September 21, 2007, 05:02:27 AM » by Dax
There is iron in your words, Dale. Thank you

DR
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When critics speak of being party to a cull, then treat you as a trained seal — I say ignore the bastards.
"There will come a day when a carrot, freshly observed, will spark a revolution." — Paul Cezanne

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« Reply #6 on: September 21, 2007, 01:01:45 PM » by Michael Firewalker
dear Dax----I am so glad you are in the world...

michael
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« Reply #7 on: September 22, 2007, 07:18:01 PM » by Nora D
now here- is a writer/woman I'd never pass up reading. . . much enjoyed.
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« Reply #8 on: September 22, 2007, 07:37:58 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks
The picture with this poem on your website is beautiful. Everyone should view it.
The traditional voice of this poem is great. Michael's right. Psalm is a good word; more comfort in this for me than any vespers prayer I ever said.
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